LOG LINE, CONCEPT & SYNOPSIS
Screenplay Treatments and completed Screenplays are
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CYBER ATTACK ©
A High-Tech International Thriller
An explosive look into the Internet’s control of politics and global economy and a sexy Cyber Cop who wants to stop it!
A smart thriller with an international element, strong female main protagonist, and a deep love story.
COLLEEN “CUCHU” LAIN, a beautiful Cyber Cop investigating an attack on her fellow agents, discovers a self-replicating software program called “Osmosis,” which can hypnotize anyone targeted over the Internet and control their actions. The shadowy, sexy CEO of the company using Osmosis, CONSTANCE eRULLA, is playing the software owner, a wealthy entrepreneur, DOUGLAS O’TOOLE, like a puppet to gain global power. Cuchu meets the handsome millionaire in person, and they immediately feel a seductive spark. As Cuchu gets more involved with her new love interest, she must find a way to outsmart the criminals and the government while shielding her budding romance.
Can Cuchu pull off a dangerous double-double cross or will she get crossed out?
CYBER ATTACK takes a deep look into the Internet’s control of politics and the global economy. While most movies focus on how characters use the Internet, in this script the Internet uses the characters. The double-double cross is reminiscent of The Thomas Crown Affair and The Asphalt Jungle, including a beautiful, intelligent woman in a lead role.
Audiences will connect with the overall issue this story raises: “What would happen if someone controlled the Internet through a virus? Could that virus threaten nuclear reactors, subways, pipelines or OMG... elections?”
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Pilot for a TV Series
A PRIVATE INVESTIGATOR teams up with a beautiful SOCIALITE on a seemingly simple case to retrieve a FOREIGN AMBASSADOR's stolen gems, only to be drawn into an intrigue that could lead to war in Europe.
A thriller with strong female and male star roles, an international element and franchise potential.
SYNOPSIS Episode One - Pilot: Cannes -The Heist:
The leader of the notorious Black Jaguar Gang and a fellow inmate are broken out of a Swiss Prison and plan to steal $136M in jewels from a Cannes Hotel, targeted to fund al-Qaeda, but are beaten to the punch by a Cat Burglar.
A beautiful socialite and former USAF Ace Fighter Pilot joins ANDREW (Drew) NIGHTINGALE’s P. I. Agency on a seemingly simple case to retrieve a foreign Ambassador’s stolen gems, only to be drawn into an International intrigue.
Along with the dignitary's gems, the same Cannes Hotel Cat Burglar also took plans for a terrorist act to disable the entire Euro Rail System. If they fall into the wrong hands, they could trigger a catastrophe worse than 9-11.
The trail of clues leads to Lake Como in Italy. Drew brings along his new partner, beautiful and intelligent Asian-American JULIA (Lia) MADISON, and their busty assistant EDIE BROWN. Lia's friend, EMMETT HUGHES, former USAF Special Ops Commando on special assignment in France, and the contact for SCHEMA joins the team.
Schema is a mysterious ally who never reveals his true identity, but is one step ahead of the FBI, CIA, etc., and sends them Intel via SKYPE to help their investigation.
Soon after arriving, Drew and Lia notice they’re being followed; someone is keeping an eye on them. Drawing on clues from Schema and Drew’s contact in the FBI, they discover there are other players, a Contessa (the contact with al-Qaeda) and a Greek Diplomat that want to get their hands on the plans and sell them to the highest bidder.
The team gets closer to finding the gems, plans, and Cat. Oh, oh ... Emmett and Edie are kidnapped by the Contessa, which draws attention away from the main objective. Her goons take them to her villa in the Italian countryside and has them interrogated.
Lia strikes off by herself commandeers a plane and flies to the villa with the intention of breaking them out. Drew rushes to her rescue, but it may already be too late…
The Black Jaguar gang attacks Lia and Drew trying to get 'their' jewels back.
They still have to get the plans and jewels back before it's too late ....
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The reason I created NIGHTINGALE was to tell a variety of action detective stories that do not deal directly with blood and guts.
DREW NIGHTINGALE witnessed his Federal Prosecutor father's murder when he was eight years old. Twenty years later he became a P. I. and vowed that he would find his father's murderer, but would not take any cases directly involving murder.
JULIA (LIA) MADISON, is his beautiful socialite sidekick who actually runs the agency using her obvious charm, while letting Drew think that he's in charge. Drew's Mystery Writer Mother introduced them at her Country Club. There is ongoing sexual tension between Lia and Drew.
NIGHTINGALE is unlike other detective shows, such as Remington Steele or Moonlighting. Drew is like Sherlock Holmes and Lia is like Sam Spade.
Motive v Fact ... Water and Oil.
Lia's Father and Mother (CIA agents) disappeared when she was just a baby. They were looking for the killer of a federal prosecutor. Lia was adopted by a rich family.
SCHEMA provides cases via SKYPE much like Charlie in Charlie's Angles or the recording to Phelps in Mission Impossible. Why did he choose Drew and Lia? Could Schema be Lia's missing father? Is there a back story link between Drew and Lia? What happened to her mother? Could she be the CAT BURGLAR in the first episode?
Interested Producers, Networks, Studios and Cable Companies may request the Pilot Script and synopses for ongoing episodes for the first and second season. Call: 818-427-3690
Finalist ScreenPlay Festival 2015
Television One Hour Series Pilot
AWARDS - REVIEWS
"CYBER ATTACK" - Finalist at the Screenwriting Showcase
(Originally named ECHO is re-written as a TV Series)
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"VISIONS" originally named Windows of the Soul
Finalist at the "Screenplay Festival 2006".
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and Check-out my latest Screenplay
Chronicle of Unchangeable Changes
Chronicle of Unchangeable Changes
An Interplanetary Fantasy Thriller
An object is sent to Earth from a parallel planet causing an imbalance. The Chosen One, a teenage boy, must send it back or both Planets will be destroyed.
A fantasy thriller with strong teenage star roles -- with product and franchise potential
A STABLEBOY, a HORSE, and a valuable CREST are sent to Earth from Parallel Planet THEIA by mistake. ANZA QI (13), Chinese-American, doesn’t know it, but he is the only one with the power to send them back.
DIMITRI, the Stable Boy, was changed into a RAVEN, the horse into a BRONZE STATUE, and the Crest ... the Crest seems to be the key to everything.
But it’s more complicated than it might seem ... Anza has to learn about the parallel planet, his Lakota Indian counterpart XANDR SOFTWIND, how to use his MAGICAL TRANSFER RING (and other magical stuff), interpret the CHRONICLE OF UNCHANGEABLE CHANGES, deal with the BAD GUYS that want control of the crest, and get everything back on tract by February 29th.
Anza and Xandr simultaneously meet the Equilibrium Child NOUS, an occupant of the 4D world of ANON. They are told of the great task before them to save their worlds.
Meanwhile the boys are being observed by DAIYU the Black Jade, an outcast from Anon, who lives in the SPACE-BETWEEN-DIMENSIONS. He sends his protégé KATIPO to shape shift and imitate the boy’s mothers in order to get the Crest for himself.
He must get there first or miss his opportunity to control the Planets .
Anon, The Immortal Unknown has been watching in the COSMOS COMPREHENDER, knows what the Black Jade plans to do ... knows that the PRESENCE is not pleased, and decides to summon the THUNDER BEINGS to help the boys.
The boys learn to move trans-dimensionally between the planets without creating any imbalance ... They get closer to finding the Crest, but the Black Jade and the other Bad Guys get there first ... fight it out ... the Crest is now in the wrong hands. The boys learn to interact with the Thunder Beings ... they find the Crest ... but now comes a new challenge ...
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Screenwriting Showcase Awards Winners
Grand Prize Winner: THE ALGERIAN, by Randall Silvis
Finalists:NEED, by Biana Kovic
THE ALGERIAN, by Randall Silvis
BUD LIGHT, by Michael T, Portwood
CYBER OSMOSIS, by William Nona
BLOOD OF PATRIOTS, by Brent Kenton Jordan
MOVING MEE-MAW, by Todd Alexander Long
WARM BEER, by Steve Wojachowski
YA GOTTA DO WHAT YOU GOTTA DO, by Nedra H. Miller
SHOCKWAVE, by Chris Ramlochan
A DAY AT THE BEACH, by Mike Sherer
TAKE ME TO THE RIVER, by Mary V. Dunkerly
WEDDINGTON STREET, by Elaine Chekich
THE MENTALIST, by Todd S. Yellin
SPENDING JORDAN, by Susan Lee
WILD NIGHT, by Gideon Cross
SONG OF SILENCE, by Miranda Kwok
P.J., by Mark M. Quown
THE MAXIM, by Blaise Winters
WHITEBOY, by Hector Serra
KATE'S WAR , by Jina Bacarr
DELPHINUS, by Tom o'Donnell
BALLS, by Bernard J. McBride
A PIECE OF JEFF, by Steve Abrams
COLLEGE DAZE, by Peg Stephens
TRADING UP, by Rob Ferraz
THE GOOD OLD DAYS, by Colleen Cooper De Maio
GREENER PASTORS, by Michael McPherson & Brian Henstridge
AMERICAN EVENING, by Jen Farley
Notes by Larry Myles of Red Inkworks
Nice premise for an action film, a storyline that holds the reader’s interest by increasing the tension level.
The characters are surprisingly well developed for a plot driven story and certainly do their part by involving the reader in an entertaining story. The writer has been able to show us characters with goals that are tangible as well as visible.
The plot works well, starting off as a hard hitting action story and ending the same way, though with interesting diversions re: romance mingled into the intrigue.
Pacing is always an important element, but action stories live (or die) on split second timing and accelerated pacing. The momentum created in CYBER OSMOSIS stems from the writer’s ability to move into the scene late and depart early. Not to mention the attention paid to providing a lean dialogue and scene setups that lightly sketch the ‘where’ so we can dive right back into the action. Good work.
Formatting skills are to be commended, showing both a knowledge and respect for industry standards. Stick to this discipline, as it lets the industry know that they have the work of a professional writer in front of them.
Discussing a writer’s style (voice) is always dicey when the reader only has one script to read. But when there are two by the same writer, the reader can come to a more competent conclusion, re: voice. In your case, the writer’s voice is subtle and never overbearing. Always a bonus.
The promise of the story idea is clear right from the lead-in, and the promise is kept within a structure that delivers the goods.
There are no corrective notes to offer, as this story is tight and (imo) market ready. It was a pleasure to visit the world you have created in CYBER OSMOSIS.